I stand before you
naked, unkempt
wanting you to see me
the real me
the me I myself cannot see
I want you to see in me
all the things you’ve ever wanted
everything and nothing all at once
nothing special and all you could ever imagine
it’s not that much to ask for
or so I would hope to think
I stand before you
just as I am
asking you to see me
and love me
no wallowing emo talk. nothing extradordinary. possibly an average thought. feelings that everyone has. but good poetry evokes some sort of common feeling for the reader. is it possible that bringing actual feelings rather than sweeping an audience away with a flowery regurgitation that crashes over them in tidal wave of words but means nothing in reality because lets face it... most of them only unerstand about half of your words anyway... so a real look at whats you verses masturbatory inclinations of oh thats pretty... or how sad...
ReplyDeleteanyway... i told you id comment whenever you wrote something i liked... i commented on the walmart cart... and im here now... because while this little number may not be mind blowing, or humorous, it exposes your need for aproval... your desire for love... things that i know to be very real even if you dont always admit it... and i say brava... its easy to express emotions that arent really you... writing about your self... the real self... is comlicated... and sometimes you say more when you say less